Review Due: Wednesday, July 19 (close of business)
As Management Committee members you have the privilege of reviewing the draft manuscript, and we ask that you respect this privilege and do not share any components (whole or otherwise) with colleagues, family, or friends. This is the first time PREP has offered this kind of highly sensitive material to MC members, in hopes that this process works so that we can continue to do so in the future. Thank you in advance for your patience as we underscore the importance of this, and for your support and cooperation in keeping this strictly confidential.
PREP relies on your expertise and practical knowledge to help ensure that this report is perceived as credible, legitimate, and useful to the many stakeholders in our region. Given the quantity and quality of the technical review that has gone into developing the draft manuscript by the TAC and external reviewers, we are asking you to weigh in on the report’s overall messaging and clarity for our target audiences (See Creative Brief for details on audiences, intended messaging, etc).
As a reminder, we have contracted Roca Communications to manage this manuscript and all associated graphics once we have incorporated your feedback. This includes copyediting, working with the designer, and then proofreading the final product. Roca Communications will be using the attached style guide to ensure that the final report and all related products (website, Policy Guide, Citizen’s Guide, etc.) are grammatically correct, contain no typos, have standardized treatment of graphics, and are consistent in style and tone. This frees you up to focus on what’s important—the substance of the report and the messages it is conveying. Also, we know the manuscript is long so we encourage you to focus on those sections that are most germane to your expertise.
The best way for us to receive your comments/edits is through the Microsoft Word “Track Changes” function. We encourage you to use the “add comment” function for more wordy thoughts. Following your review, please email your copy of the manuscript with edits/comments/suggestions to Abigail.Lyon@unh.edu.
If you have any questions, please contact Rachel – Rachel.Rouillard@unh.edu; 603-862-3948
Questions we would like for you to address in your review:
Is the presentation of the data clear and accurate in the text?
Is the presentation of the graphics clear and accurate in the text?
Are the conclusions well balanced, clearly communicated, and supported by the data?
Are there key messages missing for any one indicator?
Use track changes for all edits (please use the “add comment” function for more wordy thoughts)
You are not required to offer feedback.
If you choose, you may offer feedback on those sections that are of most interest to you.
All feedback that arrives on time (close of business Wednesday, July 19), will be considered.
There is no guarantee that any specific feedback from any one person, will be implemented.
The final choice of what goes into the State of Our Estuaries Report will be made PREP staff, after careful consideration of all the feedback.
Materials for Review
Manuscript Section One: pages 1-47
Manuscript Section Two: pages 48-87
In the event that you only want to comment on one section, below is a breakdown of what is included in each file.
Section one: pages 1-47
- Letter from the Executive Director
- Placeholder for watershed map
- Executive summary
- Estuarine Health: Stress and Resilience
- Placeholder for indicator summary graphic
- Indicator table
- Impervious surface
- Nutrient loading
- Nutrient concentration
- Dissolved oxygen
- Placeholder for saltmarsh indicator (ready August)
- Total suspended solids
- Shellfish harvest opportunities
Section two: pages 48-87
- Beach advisories
- Toxic contaminants
- Migratory fish
- Conservation lands (general)
- Conservation lands (focus areas)
- Oyster restoration
- Migratory fish restoration
- Social indicators (opening)
- Housing permit approvals
- Stormwater management effort
- Stewardship behavior
- Placeholder for monitoring map
- Looking ahead: 2018 & beyond
- Placeholder for development process graphic